I enjoyed the dissonant chords and the constant ambiance you created by allowing the sustain to rule. The lyrics are good. I don't mind that the vocals aren't mixed over the guitar, because they meld together in an ambient frenzy.
Love this work, bro.
Thank you very much! What you wrote here was exactly what I was going for.
I am glad to hear you like it. :)
Sorry, wrote this last night but internet went out
About time... You've made something I give two shits about.
First and foremost issue was leveling. If it was me, I'd have mixed the lead a little more quietly. There were certain other elements that weren't blended in well enough on the left pan and the bass needs to be a bit more dynamic, especially if you do make the lead more quiet. I mean, I'm not saying it doesn't stand out, but perhaps it should, more at certain points where I feel you're trying to get the bass to hit you in the face (otherwise, this would be a miniscule tweak in the mid range).
Second issue was little blips of clippage at certain points, most notably at the ending fade out sequence. I know that this ain't no mo'fuckin' dB clipping, so I couldn't tell you what the fuck is causing it.
Now, on to praise. The song carries that sort of Japanese metal/pop vibe throughout which I find quite pleasant and I think it could be successfully converted into that genre with the proper instrumentation (plus if I heard the lead as vocals like I am in my head, I think I'd love the resulting song). In this respect, you could classify it as 'happy hardcore', but it doesn't have the same mindlessness you get from other songs in that genre, so I'm not sure it would be due.
The song has a nice length. It could go for a switched up breakdown, but that's not exactly necessary in the least. So, what you have here is a well structured song with few issues, zero outstanding issues and a good hook. Great job, kardesh.
awesome, being the attention whore i am it makes me glad when i find out extra shits are being given about me! :)
the clipping is the wavetable channel and also the volume envelope changes; each individual sound channel is only 4-bit, which means only 15 different dynamic levels for each = you can hear soft clicks between each level.
as for genre, i'm not really fussed but i'm leaning more towards power pop or something like that.
Uh huh...
You need to work on your mixing and the distorted guitar needs a little bit of tweaking on the tone, if you ask me. I mean, really, having the clean guitar completely on the left pan and the distorted guitar completely on the right was just an earache and it made the whole track feel empty. Get that shit more centered and then ad a little bit more. Perhaps some atmospheric effects or something.
Otherwise, I rather enjoyed the song. Good luck to ye.
Yeah I've just started getting into mixing and it's not as simple as it seems. I appreciate you taking the time to leave me feedback.
We have a winner!
I have to say, when the first recognizable rhythmic beat came in, I was stoked. I always wanted that kind of thing going on in some of my songs, but I don't have electronic powers required to do so. Whether or not you did it on purpose, you really captured a Rob Zombie sound here. Funny thing, he just played a show here a couple days ago.
Now the whole song is great and dandy, grimey, industrial coolness until you hear the ending. What the hell were you thinking with such an abrupt and unexpected ending? I do some weird shit myself, so I can understand if it's symbolic or something, but it was so unsatisfying. It's like being totally drunk, having a ton of fun and then your friend comes into the room, making out with your ex girlfriend with his wank out. It's a total buzz kill. If it weren't for that ending, I'd give it a 10/10. Yeah, that's how bad that ending is.
Hey Rahmemhotep. I made a decisision to stop it suddenly for a reason. When rewatching resident evils i realised that the music would just stop dead. No gradual ending or anything. I always slowly fade out, or bring the song to a close. The disrupting ending I felt made things seem unconclusive, somewhat how you'd feel after fighting a hoard of zombies. There's always more to come.
It was a conscious decision. You'll see what I mean here. How the music is broken up by Marco Beltrami.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=AvZDJK Jxlls
Thanks again! I may do another version for you. :)
Well!
Yo dawg dis shit be bangin'. No, for real, I didn't expect to find this when I was just surfing through the portal for metal. Reminds me of Japanese metal and it has a very Japanese feel to it. I'm not saying that the Japanese language sounds like Swedish, no, not in the least, only a total fucking idiot would say that.
Despite really liking it, I thought that there was some strange quality about the way you mixed your vocals. Perhaps they need more bass? I'm not sure.
It'd be chill to collab sometime. (you can ignore the sound of my current entries, I have a new mic)
thanks a lot man! haha japanese, eh? can't say i know anything about japanese metal, but that's pretty cool i guess haha. yeah, the mixing isn't exactly flawless.. i'll try to work a bit with the bass in the future. thanks again dude, much appreciated!
I see.
I like it a whole fuckin' lot. It's industrial, ambient and XP all at once. The ending was a little.. Too sudden? I think there may have been a better way to end the song. It reminds me of a couple of my old songs and a little bit of the Trans Siberian orchestra.
I see a quickly passing ice covered landscape. Many pictures of frozen structures hit me as I speed by them. Jagged, powder covered structures of ice that seem as though they could uproot themselves and dance the delicate ways of a ballerina. Beyond them is a seemingly flat landscape, frostbitten and clean.
This is without my good headphones on and coming out of computer speakers but I think it's orchestrated quite well. Didn't have too many problems with it, myself. Although I do feel like you are holding back here. Wrong? Right? Who knows?
Lol the ending was that way because of the 4 minute limit, and because I had gotten to that part of the song and just was like, "you know what? I'm just going to leave it like this for now until the competition is over."
So that issue will be adressed later, I am glad that someone likes it :3
It seems that...
This is pretty ok, contrary to what I thought it was going to be. Now there were problems with it though, like the choir VST or w/e you kids call them was too quiet. The other major problem would be a sudden ending. Do you have the official soundtrack? All the songs loop but they fade out at the end of them on the OST.
I suggest tweaking it a little bit and then re-uploading it but hey, that's just me and I'm an immense fan of the music from Final Fantasy 7. Good work!
no no no thank u i need to know this thank you :D
Oh, sweet!
This is really cool! It does actually make me picture mountains, at first dowsed in fog, then uncovered by light and then it turns to night. Excellent progression and mastering and the use of the odd sound here and there is what sold me on it. One of the notable turn offs was actually the bass drum that comes in at 1:53, even though I'm an experimental artist, for some reason this just sounded really off or maybe too loud. In any case I hope you do well in the contest!
Thank you ! Good luck to you too !
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